December 20th, 2010
Interviewer Page 27
Technically Carrie would be a noteworthy mission. But seeing how big they failed that mission, I don’t think they really like talking about it.
Technically Carrie would be a noteworthy mission. But seeing how big they failed that mission, I don’t think they really like talking about it.
December 20th, 2010 at 09:42
Mmm spellcheck. XD Poor Lock.
December 20th, 2010 at 11:49
… Spellcheck? I can’t see anything wrong, I guess I’m dyslexic by now…
December 20th, 2010 at 11:57
If you’re using ‘gave me the freedom’ then ‘gave’ and ‘saw’ means it’s pasted tense, which means ‘need’ should be ‘needed’.
‘Not anything noteworthy’ sound overall odd, should probably be ‘Nothing noteworthy’.
‘But that just a matter of time’ you forgot an ‘is’. ‘But that is just a matter of time’.
December 20th, 2010 at 11:58
Oh, but check with Kenny first of course.
December 20th, 2010 at 14:31
so… nothing wrong with the spelling then xD
Well, I guess I’ll wait until kent comments and reaps even more holes in my inability to formulate a single sentance.
December 20th, 2010 at 15:06
fine. GRAMMAR-NAZI! :D
December 22nd, 2010 at 13:34
I see nothing wrong with either of those sentences. Yes, the tense-switch could parse a bit strangely, but she’s talking about what happened in the past (“They saw my potential…”), and then switches to the present to make a statement about herself (“I need freedom”). But “needed” woould not be wrong there either, so do whatever you want with it. And “not anything” works as well as “nothing”, though “nothing” probably parses better for speech. It’s not biggie, but I’d change it.
However, you’ve got some other minor things – first of all, she said she was in the navy, not the army. Those are different things. Unless that was meant as Mona’s mistake.
Also, in the aforementioned sentence with “not anything noteworthy”, you end the first line with a comma, yet start the next line with a capital B. You should keep the comma, so make that B into a b. Also, “that just a matter of time” – would be “that’s”. However, it should actually be “it’s”.
Oh, one final thing i just noticed – “quite yet” should be “just yet”.Actually I think that’s fine now that I think about it a little moreAnd this, kids, is why I’m the real grammar Nazi here. Heil!
December 22nd, 2010 at 15:23
Spelling has been corrected. And that’s why I waited for the real grammar Nazi to correct me. Hail! (mostly cuss I’d just have to fix other stuff as well) xD
I ARE TEH LAZEE!!!
December 24th, 2010 at 16:59
Fine. I’ll keep quiet. >>